||Well, I'd just like to comment, I did spell-check the thing, and corrected a lot of the errors that were in the first draft. Unfortunantly, I had to do this in Kmail (since Bluefish crashed whenever you attempt to replace a misspelled word), and for some reason the cut-and-paste between Bluefish, Kmail and Mozilla wasn't working properly, and Mozilla was getting the unspell-checked stuff posted to it, not the corrected stuff.
Now, the tenses were a bit problematic, and that's something I'm going to have to work on. I wrote the very first of the story one day, and the significantly larger second half the next. Unfortunantly, in that time, I forgot about the tattoo. I realy wish I hadn't, because it would have been really cool.
I'm going to do a slightly revised version of this and send it to the Erotic Mind Control Story Archive. It will be a second draft (as opposed to this rough draft) and will hopefully be a much cleaner read.
As for Rebecca giving the guy the bottle, well, it's a porn. She doesn't care if he uses it improperly, because he was such a great fuck she figures it'll actually benifit the women that get dosed. (Once again, porn logic. Also, don't forget that she herself used the potion improperly...)
In the dark times, will there still be singing?
Yes, there will be singing. There will be singing about the dark times. -- Bertolt Brecht